Here is a rough outline, merging as many ideas together as possible. At the second collective we had: Big Fire, Michael, Emily, Kirk, Patrick, Venus (and JoJo) and Spencer.
Shifts & Fluctuations
This is a piece about movement: the ins and outs of a city. There will always be movement on stage –people moving in and out, staying , arriving, departing… cinematic.
That is the story here …or a story…a city of movement …hence the water metaphor. Read on, comment and critique. We will have a working draft for Tuesday. PLEASE READ the section on notes -below.
Boat/Boy Part I. –boat follows
Part II. Everyone begins to arrives on stage from different directions –center up
(enact migrations …) VIDEO – perspective-
‘streaming by. All enter.. move differently /different directions yet it’s orchestral and choral- a cacophony of movement and sound.
Mayor –diversity story…piece (group shifts)
Fluctuations & Shifts
white people stay/ — Mrs. Chun piece
Hailey Skating Story— NEEDS to be crafted
Fluctuations & Shifts
Carmen
Fluctuations & Shifts –waiting
Bus Stories …–access /transience… transportation
Roller rink —there is no place..no center.. .no (watching the EMU students arrive and leave—the loss of the only place where the youth could envision ‘moving’)
Fluctuations & Shifts
Student voice –come here …
International Voices
Big Fire/Trapped
Tortoise and the Hare ?
Fluctuations & Shifts
(BUILDING….)
Peter- Store Owner
Mayor –return…?
Boat Part III.
Closing:
Need: Reverend interview and Peter interview transcribed.
NOTES: Need more non-realism/story based like the Tortoise & Hare piece
Commercials/PSA’s …?
SHOULD THERE BE A COMMENTARY/EDITORIAL COMMENTS Throughout – another convention….IDEAS? What would make sense in this piece….in this community? A traffic cop?
SHOULD paper boat be in all scenes?
like it-like boat in every scene idea
wow~ Thank you all so much for all of your work on this!! SHOULD THERE BE A COMMENTARY/EDITORIAL COMMENTS- I don’t think a cop is the best way to go- I know there is some mistrust of cops by some members of the community. I love the idea of the commentary/editorial though…it could be youth member or if we need a character perhaps a ypsi historian or someone new to the city- if we’re going metaphorically what about a ship captain connecting to that metaphor- or a sailor as many of the members int he community seem to consider themselves on that status level instead of a captain’s status level. Should it be the same person or can it change? Can it just be us in the class- laying naked our process? or should it be more about facts and information? What about a newspaper reporter?
I also like the boat in every scene- seen on stage at all times. It adds a nice consistency and reinforces the metaphor of the river.Oh- and if we go with the newspaper reporter- perhaps the boat can be made out of newspaper?
anything you need from us for Tuesday? 🙂
I like the boat idea too. I do agree that we need more non-realism. The script is a little heavy right now. Since we have a monitor maybe Marty can come up with a creative piece. He is amazing with that… program. (I’m having a brain fart!)
Decky, I thought I heard you say that for the opening you think we should step. I actually liked your first suggestion. A unified rhythm of voices and body. Do you remember?
See you all Tuesday.
Venus
is there a good balance of positive and nagative stories at this point?
Thank you Big Fire, Emily, Kirk, Michael, Venus, JoJo, Patrick, Joanna and Spencer.
I like the opening, the ideas of the boat and movements. They are great frame for the piece, letting people in audience think instead of explaining everything.
Decky asked me what is the story of ‘why’ I am here…
Here is my response (sorry if it doesn’t make sense);
I came to Ypsi for study
that’s it
no more and no less
I knew Ypsi is very different from Tokyo
people said Ypsi has nothing fun
Tokyo has EVERYTHING, literally, everything accessible, overwhelmingly many options around
people said Ypsi is cold, has long winter
Tokyo hasn’t seen heavy snow in a long time
(we were excited to see schoolyard was all covered by white snow. It was 12 years ago, unless my memory is wrong)
people said it’s hard to live without a car in Ypsi
Driving in Tokyo is troublesome…always busy and narrow road
If there is train coming every 3 or 5 min and taking you everywhere, why don’t you use it?
I knew the things about Ypsi, which never got in my way to come to here
rather, they made Ypsi sound like a perfect place to focus on study
Once I arrived at Ypsi, I realized that I was wrong
I’m not saying that everything I heard about Ypsi was not true
I was wrong, because I thought studying is one of choices I can choose
NO, here in Ypsi, I have no choice but studying, staying at my apartment on campus or library on campus 24/7
because sideways is not complete, I have no car
But it’s ok
because I came here for study
and once I’m done with EMU, I’ll leave here, Ypsi.
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Wow! I feel obligated to say more-but I really liked it! I ike paper boat with newspapaer reporter idea…or a different boat with each transition…or boats add up…or start with many boats and take boats away until we are one…
YES Some non-realism or “comic relief” if you will-I know it does not have to exist (remember 7th dream Donald…anyone else familiar) but we are being so specific with our topic-we have make sure we continue to illustrate positive/negative balance-in my humble opinion!
Not gonna spell check…please forgive!
I agree ..NO COP we are going to have 3 PSA’s
International
Transportation
mmh..Neighborhood–I forgot-KIRK?! I wrote two for tomorrow -they give some levity, still very specific to the city..I think they work.
Tomorrow- we will have a pretty solid script.
No stepping though there may be some repetitive rhythmic movement that may sound or look like a step but not stepping at all. The opening piece-Migrations will will do on the 23rd.
Tomorrow-read scripts, cast parts, stage one section if we can and work to finish the international piece and Hailey’s at least.
I also have a TO DO list –it’s…coming!
Boats, Huron River, Tokyo …
Good metaphor
It keep reminding me of a music “Water from the same source” by Rachel’s.
(You can listen to it in YouTube)
I just wonder how to balance this piece;
There must be some heavy contents or comedic pieces.
Our job can be measuring the weight of … “monologues” or “interviews”,
and cook them with other ingredients (using TIME, SPACE, MOVEMENT …etc)
One more;
I am really interested in working with our teenage artists.
… Spencer maybe plays mayor and Patrick maybe plays Rev. Banks,
Nadine can be Mrs, Chun …. any possibility…